Fishing Memories

Michael, Please review my first draft (Reel Rush posted today 11-6-10) of changing the fishing video to have a improved story line. I wrote a B outline first and decided the video main focus was going to be the connection my son and I had on the trip. Thanks John

Thanks Michael. I am working on telling a story and pretending I am explaining it to my 8 year old grandson. I am also working on capturing the best images and footage that fits the story line. Stay tuned.

Hammy You've got some great footage What you are lacking is coherent storytelling. By the time you are done with this video you have probably spent hours and hours on it, and before that, hours and hours on the boat itself while it was happening. You know the story so well because you have lived it now several times. But for the person watching it, they don't have the vaguest idea what it is going to be about. Therefore, you have to explain it to them as though they have never seen it before and have no idea what you are talking about - which is always the case with people who watch a film. You need to start with some of your lovely shots (your best in fact) and then narrate very simply and clearly. This is the Muskegon River. Then introduce the character in the boat - this x, this is y, and this me. Last month (or whenever) we spent a day fishing the Muskegon River. And this is our story." Get the idea. Tell me a story! Tell it to me. And tell it to me as though I was a very precocious 12 year old. Simple, direct to the point. Once I understand what is going on, it is much easier for me to follow the whole thing. Nicely shot however, and has the potential to be really good but you HAVE to work on your storytelling. m 1 :