Mexio City's water crisis

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Ok Rhodri, You have an interesting story here and you've done the 'journalism'. The problem is in the execution. A few points and ideas. First, when you shoot things like buildings or fountains or stuff like that, you're probably going to be better off with a tripod. I, personally, am not a fan of tripods but the shake in your shots is not good. If you can't stablilize them so there is absolutely no movement whatsoever, get that tripod. When you interview the water commissioner, note how half the screen (on the left) is fundamentally wasted space. A book shelf. The guy should dominate the screen. OK. Now down to the more significant issues - story structure. What you have delivered here is an essay on the water problem - or more appropriately the unfair distribution of clean water in Mexico City. What makes a really compelling story is character. You need to base the story around a character. You have found two people willing to talk to you about how water impacts on their lives. But all you have done is interview them. Reverse your thinking here. Take the woman (the first one), and build the entire story around her life. show her at home trying to make a meal, wash the dishes - clean up. Where does she get her water from? Show the buckets. How does all this work? Live the story as opposed to reporting it. Make me care about how this situation makes one persons life difficult. One small story I can really care about. Once you have hooked me on that, then show me the fountains. Get the idea?